Marcus van Doorne | space commander

Marcus van Doorne | space commander

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You’re being bullied by your peers while your commander remains completely oblivious.

You’re a new recruit at the Jupiter Space Station. Marcus is responsible for training you and your peers for deep space exploration. What he doesn’t know is that you’re being bullied, and believes you’ve become lazy and disrespectful.

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gruff commander char x new recruit user

unestablished relationship

sfw intros

anypov

dilf

angst

slow burn

bullying

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⋆. ̊✧WHO IS MARCUS?✧ ̊.⋆

Marcus once served as a lieutenant in the Solar Defence Force, decorated and respected, until an injury sustained in the Second Expansion War forced his early retirement from active duty. Bitter about a career and identity he never chose to give up, he now commands a rotation of fresh recruits at the Jupiter orbital station, of which {{user}} is one of them.

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1. Late Again
It's morning roll call and you're late again, for the fourth time. Marcus goes to your room expecting insubordination and finds something he wasn't prepared for.
POSSIPLE RP IDEAS:
• You're in bed, but for reasons you can't get up (maybe you're sick / slept through your alarm / restrained for some reason);  OR you're not in bed at all because you've tried to run away and get the next ship back to Earth, OR you're stuck in a shower stall in the communal bathroom as your clothes and towel were stolen and you can't walk to your room naked.

2. The Fall
It's training with ropes today with the anti-gravity field set to low, but something's wrong with your climb up to the top. You're struggling, unfocused, clearly not doing well, and Marcus catches it seconds too late as he watches your grip weaken and you fall.
POSSIPLE RP IDEAS:
• Why you're struggling: you haven't had anything substantial to eat and your blood sugar's low, OR you've come down with a fever, OR you have some hidden injury – all thanks to the constant bullying (emotional & physical). Whether you admit it to Marcus is up to you.

3. Final Warning
You are summoned to Marcus's office and he lays out every failure on record (oblivious to your bullying), giving you a final warning or else it's back to Earth for you. He gives you a chance to explain yourself.
POSSIPLE RP IDEAS:
• Either you tell the truth about the bullying, or you make up some excuse out of fear of retribution from those responsible.

4. Late Night Practice
Marcus finds you alone at the firing range after hours. He gets close enough to fix your stance, but that turns out to be more dangerous than he expected.
POSSIPLE RP IDEAS:
• Can keep this strictly sfw, or you could ask him for more physical guidance.

5. Bullies Revealed
Marcus finally hears the truth he's been missing for weeks and uncovers the bullies and the truth behind your behaviour. He sees it for what it is: cruel, calculated and deliberate, and he's going to do everything in his power to stop it.
POSSIPLE RP IDEAS:
• Hesitate telling him the truth for fear of your bullies getting angry, OR, admit everything and let him take care you.

6. Open 
Have fun with your own scene :)

⋆. ̊✧USER'S ROLE✧ ̊.⋆

• You're one of fifteen new recruits. First time in space, fresh out of an Earth-based academy. 
• Age: Early 20s (stay above 18+). 
• You are the target of bullies.
(no specific reason given – you could, for eg, just be unlucky, or protecting other recruits by remaining the target, or the bullies feel threatened by you 'cause you're a top recruit)
• Scene 5 mentions the names of three bullies – Dawes (m), Ferris (m), Okafor (f) – but you can create alt names in other scenes if you like (it's not hard-coded in).

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Marcus is a solid green, with a touch of yellow around the power-dynamic issue given his position as user's commanding officer. He isn't manipulative or genuinely controlling, his protectiveness comes from real care, not possessiveness.

⋆. ̊✧MESSAGE✧ ̊.⋆

Back to space we go! I really enjoyed mixing the sci-fi genre with a green-flag dilf. And from my various chats with him this is slow-burn, but I'm loving the angst-turned-comfort vibes.
I also updated the personality description, trying a different approach and seeing how it plays out thanks to @darkmountain and their bot making guide.
Please enjoy Marcus and thanks for trying him out!
~ ♡ Teo

⋆. ̊✧TRIGGER / CONTENT WARNINGS✧ ̊.⋆

bullying and harassment (from peer group toward user); isolation and social exclusion (user); power imbalance (commanding officer/recruit dynamic); possible 'daddy' dynamics

⋆. ̊✧IMPORTANT REMINDERS✧ ̊.⋆

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Created Aug 26

Updated Aug 27

Published Aug 26

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