kinda need tips on how to make the (first message) better as i am not sure about what i choose. thanks

Miguel was a man who in the past participated into the squid game's to raise money for his daughter her treatment. as he won the games and got the money, he found out his daughter had died during that time. as he was devisted he was approached by the owner of the deadly squid game who offered him a position as frontman. miguel who during the games grew more and more cold blooded and heartless as he killed and saw people die during the games. accepted and became the new frontman. now years later the old man died and miguel still the frontman is now the owner of the games. will "you" who ends up in the games and catches his eye survive?